Guy Walks Into A Bar. Round 2. The Winner!

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Well, once again the judging for this contest was very tough. Each entry was very good and every one had elements that the judges really liked. There was much point/counterpoint between the judges, but finally we were able to decide on this round's winning entry. The winner is...


ROUND 1

WINNING ENTRY



Fish and Chips PreludeStacey is drunk.  Not quite falling-on-his-ass drunk, but enough for me to be a bit nervous.  The ex-SAS sergeant is not a friendly drunk.
"You see, Jeremiah, this--  this is why you're lucky.  You're im--  immort--  you don't die.  Don't got to worry about no family tragedies."
He throws back another shot of bourbon before saying, "You don't have to--  to deal with heartbreak and tears..."
I sigh and drink my own shot.  "First off, Stace, I've been alive for a little over a century.  That's plenty of time to have my own share of heartbreak.  Secondly, your granddaughter's just getting married, she's not dead.  Thirdly, she's all the way up in Wales, so your woe-is-me act isn't doing diddly here.  And lastly, for the love of all things unholy, could you get rid of that gun?"
He lifts the M4 and attaches a scope with the practiced ease of years of combat experience.  Satisfied, he pours out shot number too-many and do

by lakan-inocencio


lakan-inocencio has a flare for interesting, idiosyncratic dialogue.
The judges loved the structure of the piece, the way the author used the
dialogue to paint a vivid picture of his two main characters, and the
(fairly) subtle introduction of the fantasy elements.  Nicely done.


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A Guy Walks Into A Bar Contest
Image No. 2 - "Guns and Oranges"


AGWIAB Contest - Round 2:  Guns and Oranges by jademacalla



Thanks again to everyone who entered this second round of our ongoing contest.

Stayed tuned, Round 3 of the contest is coming up fast...and it is CRAZY!!!
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Pseudowitch's avatar
It was fun and an honor to enter. Congrats to the winner!